Limerick, Paddy the Bad -

[Hemorrhage]

Those who knew Paddy would tell you a story from the days he was a young lad,
when he stumbled upon,
a mighty fine sum,
enough to turn Paddy real bad!

Instead of returning the pouch full of gold he decided to disappear,
this was the biggest mistake,
that he ever would make,
and of that he'd soon be aware!

For the gold had belonged to a man who was feared for killing more than a million.
He had loved and kissed her,
his very own sister,
since incest was the best in his opinion!

Unlucky Paddy then stumbled upon this beast who was looking for his gold.
Paddy tried to lie,
"The gold is nearby!"
But the beast did not believe what he was told.

Paddy the thief had been caught red handed and didn't know what to tell.
So he tried another,
"I am your brother!"
Then he knew that this wouldn't bode well.

For the beast had stopped and started to stare, he spoke with a voice full of lust!
"Than you i am older,
so brother bend over!
We'll enjoy ourselves until dusk!"

Poor Paddy the liar, the thief and the used had learned something outside of class.
If you're going to lie,
have a friend nearby,
a friend who can save your dear ass!

Cheese!

[Runch]

Dude fuckin genius...but you have a fucked up head.........i want in.........

and seeing as you want C&C

you could maybe work on your spelling a bit. i do notice some minor errors.

and i would give this a 9/10

9/10 because i like that you keep using "paddy" but at the same time it gets kinda old.

but man i do really enjoy your style....and do keep it up

[Hemorrhage]

thx m8 for the feedback, would like to see some more

[conspired]

lol that's awesome. The only thing you could improve would be a few spelling errors and such as stated by Runch.

Keep up the good work..

[Hemorrhage]

Originally posted by conspired@A Minute Ago
lol that's awesome. The only thing you could improve would be a few spelling errors and such as stated by Runch.

Keep up the good work..

[snapback]100875[/snapback]

what spelling errors? just ran it through spellcheck... but thanks for the comment

[Runch]

you said "Cheese" two times.

[Hemorrhage]

i know, i wrote it, then edited it... but yeah, on second thought its quite stupid...