i really suck at names.....so i dont know what to

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I’m dead, I’m sleeping.

In the shadows you can find me creeping.

Twisted halls, Lifeless falls.

Blackened holes, A single rose.

Decaying corpse, Ground shrivels, quakes, warps.

Vision torn, Wake up screaming.

Life reborn, Now I’m dreaming.

[Sp0rk-eh]

great job.

B)

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Thanks Sp0rk-eh ....any thing you didnt like? any comments? anything? ANYTHING AT ALL. CMON WOMAN. THE SUSPENSE IS KILLING ME. AHHHHHHHHHHH.....MEOW

[xane]

It sounds like a nursery rhyme XD

[Runch]

Originally posted by xane@15 Minutes Ago
It sounds like a nursery rhyme XD

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what kind of eff'd up parent would read this to their kid? would you? cuz i wouldnt. or would i?

[xane]

I was just trying to say i thought it rhymed alot. Thats all, but other than that I like it.

[Sp0rk-eh]

i'd read it to my kid...

Broaden their horizons.

As you can tell, i never plan on having children...

[ilovecoheed]

good job man sounds sweet! i'd read it to my kids lol.

[Runch]

Originally posted by xane@38 Minutes Ago
I was just trying to say i thought it rhymed alot. Thats all, but other than that I like it.

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What ever do you mean?
I can’t believe what i have seen,
are you trying to say you don't like rhyming.
If it’s true i will start crying.
Watery eyes, boogie filled nose.
your sense of rhythm really blows!

haha....wow......

[Samuel]

Great form. The first and last lines ryhme, yet all the lines whith each other. Good form!

Very well planned, and thought enhanced. I really like this alot. Good work dan.