Reawake

[Jeff]

An update of my AOTW entry because I didn't have much time before. The text actually makes sense now heh.

old:


new:


I wanted to add more but I couldn't come up with anything. I'm still open to any suggested changes.

[Nightfire]

Well it looks good, vary abstract.

When you say your text makes sense now what do you mean by that. I think I'm missing the point :P.

I side borders are a bit to think IMO. The two main colors presented here green and purple are great individually, but together looks kind of like a wound color to me. If that makes sense.

For some reason these colors make me think of someone who has been hit <_< I know it's weird. Mabye a little to bright or empty on the right side of your figure.

Like the left has text and dark colors for depth. Your right needs some of that.

Nice work though I still really like it.

[phantamines]

personally, i like the background the best, or at least i think its the most well done. the background doesnt draw attention, but it doesnt feel like its unimportant either.

ya, im lost on the text also

[Jeff]

Forgot to mention that the original explanation is in the AOTW entries thread:

http://www.gfxvoid.com/forums/showth...t=22118&page=2

Hopefully that'll explain the text a bit better, if not I've failed in what I was trying to portray. It also has the horrible original version of this, it shouldn't even be looked at.

Thanks for the feedback, I'll try to add some subtle touches the the right side as well.

And another thing, is it clear that the pink thing becomes a creature at the tip? I can see it easily because I made it, but I'm wondering if it's even visible because it's important that it's noticed (because it = reawake and the main focus).

[Nightfire]

Wow no I didn't notice, I only noticed when you said it was a creature. Now the the whole thing looks better :P.

Um without knowing it's a creature it just looks like it's brigher at the end. I almost didn't notice that the light line in it was it's eye.

I don't know what do suggest to make this more noticable. Maybe a mouth? or stronger eye. Maybe make everything a bit darker to draw the it as a focal point. Not really sure though.

But now I really like it :P Maybe a bit to long only the bottom half is really require but the other is done well.

[Dale]

I think the text looks real good But you're giong to need ALOT of detail in the foreground, as the bg is really clear and shizzal

Keep it up man, update in your first post. Post links not images pleayshhh

[Jeff]

Updated. Lighting issues were fixed (easily noticeable in the thumbnails), some more details were added, and focus has been improved. Thanks for the feedback, any others?