names are no good

[Runch]

its not great
but what do you people think


I can’t seem to shake the memories from the past
They sink in deep and the depression is to much to grasp
Sitting and thinking and reminiscing of the last few years
And trying to recognize a reason for the last few tears
But the truth is pain and the pain is hate
And when I really think about it everything was fake
But I still kinda feel like I wanted it to be real
Every fuckin word you said and how it made me feel
You promised to be there from the begging with no end
But the end came came and went and my heart cant mend
Every time I think I am over your face, over your smile, and over you taste
You give me a call and all the forgetting was just a fuckin waste
You push your way back then pull yourself out with a 10 minute call
And after you hung up there was a 5 month haul
The pain still reminds me of the kind of bitch you are
But even though I see it I still wish on every star
You might call it a little bit of obsession
But its your fuckin fault for obsessing your possession
I want to be free from your god damn face
I wanna forget every fuckin smell, and every taste
Your not worth the pain I go threw everyday
But it wont be hidden, it wont be tucked away

[Brick]

Had a bad relationship recently?

Bad grammar, but I did find my way through it and it's actually pretty good in the subject and content.

[Runch]

hah yea i know....i am not good at english. ha. but thanks man

[Criss]

*Applause* Very, very good man... Screw the grammar... As long as YOU understand it, thats what counts man.

You been doing this long?
You should try to get more rhymes in(Also known as multiple), and not just at the end of each line(End- rhyme).

And if you dont come up with any rhymes... http://www.rhymezone.com

[Runch]

Thanks Criss, by 'this' do you mean writing? if so...i dont know....i put most of the stuff i wrote on here. if you look back at some of the earlier posts int he Non-Visual section you will find some of mine. thanks for that site it may be useful somtime.

[Turbo]

"i am not good at english" but you live in Minnesota! lol

Regardless, that was very good. Keep it up