2nd Ever LP xD

[zole]

Hey people here is my 2nd Large Picture i think its alot better than the 1st but thats IMO



Hope you all like it lol C&C please

Cheers
Dan.

[Papa]

You need to make the transition on the text going behind his body more solid.
Right now it looks sloppy. Pen tool out that part of his body and make everything 100% before it. If you want it to be believable that it's going behind him you have to make it clean. Text is okay aside form that.

The pen tooling is pretty distracting. Doesn't seem to serve a real purpose for me.
The Displacement on the yellow thing at the top needs to be blurred. Currently it doesn't match the depth of feild.
I think it needs a bit more work. Not bad though.

[ministaci]

like it alot very nice work!