Your focal doesn't stand out enough and your background is really weird. In my opinion, your focal should be looking at something and at the moment, he's looking at loads of lava looking stuff. The left side of the tag, around the focal is actually pretty nice. Don't like the text, border shouldn't be so thick either. Hope to see a version 2.
You should try smudging it a bit and add some c4ds in there aswel. Also try a different approach for your background choices. I don't like how the liquidfy looks on this. Good choice of render position though
Version 2 is alot more effective, but the text is weird. It feels too large and techno like. I'd go for a more Calligraphy style text and place it more closer to his chest.
Please do not bump a thread unless it hasn't been commented on within 24 hours. I think the background is a bit too chaotic and the flow is ruined, the lines go off everywhere. Still not liking the text, experiment with some clipping masks.
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ill fix the text up soon
