wow this is empty

[ilovecoheed]

well seems how there's no posts in here i guess ill post someting

im just makin this up as i go so it'll probably suck but here goes nothin

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This poem is entitled 'Forever, We Mourn.'

It's cold. As the sun sinks further into the ever darkening horizon i feel the chill of the desert night set in.
The words that you'd never know, trying to escape from my mouth, but not having the strength to break free.
You try to say it'll be alright, but it's a lost cause, in a few minutes i will be no more.

As the venom slowly makes its way through my arteries, seeping deeper throughout my body, the world as I know it begins to fade...growing dimmer and dimmer by the second.
The thought of losing you makes me sick to my stomach, never being able to hold you again, to feel you hold me tight during rough times.

Bullshit.

I couldn't go. not now...now that i have you.
But it's too late, too late for me.

All my senses begin to fade and there is a huge void where your face used to be.
Your face...so sweet, so tender...gone. Lost forever.
The heavy darkness of the void begins to overpower me, and i feel so weak all of a sudden...and now...i feel nothing.
That sliver of hope and light has faded...dimmer and dimmer...til it ceases to exist.

Don't forget me. Whatever you do. Don't forget me.
I shall live on in memory...never to know the sweet joys of marriage or raising a family.
Never to see my children graduate, to go off to college and have children.
Never to grow old...just to rot in this shallow grave..6 feet under.
...forever more.

[Samuel]

Pretty nice. I like it lots. Im not quite sure what this would be classified uner poetry, you have any idea?

[ilovecoheed]

Thanx bfg. I used to live out in cali so i kinda got inspired by that. Yeah i guess you could classify it as poetry

[Samuel]

Yea man, poetry allows us to express our feelings in other ways then abstractly. Good job.

[katgirl21]

Wow, that is amazing

It doenst seem like a poem, more like the last chapter of a the kind of novel where its all letters to someone.

Lots of meaning, soulful. You should write a book or something

[Moshiur]

Well it does seem like a poem to me. Poems and be of all form. This one is a freewrite poem. Freewrite poems can be of all form/rhythm/rhyme. Their usually filled with details of things, but don't always have to be.

Great poem ilovecoheed. I love the words you used.

[ilovecoheed]

Yeah that was actually my first poem lol, besides gay ones my English teacher made us do.

[PlatinumKittyKat]

that is just amazing.