I’m dead, I’m sleeping.
In the shadows you can find me creeping.
Twisted halls, Lifeless falls.
Blackened holes, A single rose.
Decaying corpse, Ground shrivels, quakes, warps.
Vision torn, Wake up screaming.
Life reborn, Now I’m dreaming.
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I’m dead, I’m sleeping.
In the shadows you can find me creeping.
Twisted halls, Lifeless falls.
Blackened holes, A single rose.
Decaying corpse, Ground shrivels, quakes, warps.
Vision torn, Wake up screaming.
Life reborn, Now I’m dreaming.
:o
great job.
B)
Thanks Sp0rk-eh ....any thing you didnt like? any comments? anything? ANYTHING AT ALL. CMON WOMAN. THE SUSPENSE IS KILLING ME. AHHHHHHHHHHH.....MEOW
It sounds like a nursery rhyme XD
what kind of eff'd up parent would read this to their kid? would you? cuz i wouldnt. or would i?Quote:
Originally posted by xane@15 Minutes Ago
It sounds like a nursery rhyme XD
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I was just trying to say i thought it rhymed alot. Thats all, but other than that I like it.
i'd read it to my kid...
Broaden their horizons.
As you can tell, i never plan on having children...
good job man sounds sweet! i'd read it to my kids lol.
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Originally posted by xane@38 Minutes Ago
I was just trying to say i thought it rhymed alot. Thats all, but other than that I like it.
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What ever do you mean?
I can’t believe what i have seen,
are you trying to say you don't like rhyming.
If it’s true i will start crying.
Watery eyes, boogie filled nose.
your sense of rhythm really blows!
haha....wow......
Great form. The first and last lines ryhme, yet all the lines whith each other. Good form!
Very well planned, and thought enhanced. I really like this alot. Good work dan.
