NeuroSphere

Im really sorry i havent been on in a LONG time, just with college i have hardly any time left, but anyways, i made this about 2 weeks ago because i'm not very good at making renders, so i decided to start learning.
What you guys think for first attempt? Oh and my idea of it is:
To beams of electrical energy colliding in outer space, forming a bang. The spike balls i thought to be a small amount of energy escaping before then collision, whilst the spikes on the collision is extra energy escaping. The beams bending are because like forces repel and i thought of it been the repulsion of the beams. Anyway, enough of me blabbering on .. whats your opinions?
Thanks!
WG

http://img432.imageshack.us/img432/1...here7bf.th.jpg

Generally I like the overall idea... but some of it is very choppy. If you could try smoothing it out, then I think it would be better.

Overall: 7/10

Yeah i see what you mean, when its full size it does seem smoother though, if i give you the link to see it full size it may be better, but thanks!
http://img425.imageshack.us/img425/3...osphere1xi.jpg
WG

Yeeah. That looks alot better. The full sized version seems better than the one before it. I still think that there is something off about it though... so its more like a:

8.5/10

Thanks, yeah it could do with some work, but hey, a little work and i think it will be good for me :D
WG

Waw, really like the idea behind it, the concept is the most important thing about art, also how you've represented it is interesting. Bit choppy as hell_bound mentioned, but its quite good, try making the text white with a blue outer glow with linear dodge, and it should spice it up.

I like it! it sort of looks like the main sphere thing is moving... or is that me going blind?

Yeah...i like the idea of white text with blue outer glow, it would fit the scheme of the bright white explosion.
Thanks CC, will alter it and re-post asap.

Hey Ben, i didnt see it like that until you said, i supose it does appear to be moving!
WG