Song - WIP (Name Too Long For Topic)

So I was just a little bored today and wrote another song for my band. Mind that it is all in caps. Just was lazy and made it that way.

I Told You To Look Closely, And Then Maybe You'll Find Me...Hanging From Your Bedroom Door.
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[VERSE 1]
COME ON, GET IT RIGHT
I'M GIVING YOU TONIGHT
THE WORDS ON THE WALL OF YOUR BEDROOM
TOLD YOU I COULD SAVE YOU
BREAKING THE SILENCE OF ALL THINGS
AND SCREAMING FOR THE SAKE OF SCREAMING
IT'S ALL YOUR FAULT
IT'S ALL YOUR FAULT

[PRE-CHORUS]
AM I MAKING YOU SHAKE YET?
AM I MAKING YOU SHAKE?

[CHORUS]
CAN YOU TEAR MY EYES OPEN
SO I DON'T HAVE TO SEE THIS
JUST A PART OF MY IMAGINATION
BUT NOTHING'S THE SAME
ONE WISH
TO BREAK THIS APART
DISCARD MY WORDS
AND DISCARD MY HEART

[VERSE 2]
BREATHE IN, THE WORDS OF SENTIMENT
CAUSE THESE WORDS ARE MY LAST
CAN THIS BE ALL SO SIMPLE
AND THEN CAME THAT MOMENT
OF REALIZATION
WHEN RESISTANCE TO THIS IS FATAL
AND I'LL BE LYING HERE
I'LL BE LYING HERE

[PRE-CHORUS]
AM I MAKING YOU SHAKE YET?
I HOPE I'M MAKING YOU SHAKE

[CHORUS](x2)
CAN YOU TEAR MY EYES OPEN
SO I DON'T HAVE TO SEE THIS
JUST A PART OF MY IMAGINATION
BUT NOTHING'S THE SAME
ONE WISH
TO BREAK THIS APART
DISCARD MY WORDS
AND DISCARD MY HEART

[OUTRO]
SOMETIMES WHEN YOU KNOW SOMETHING IS GONE
AND YOU RESENT TO THE FACT THAT IT IS
YOU'LL SEE HOW OBLIVIOUS YOU ARE
TO WHAT IS REALLY GOING ON
AND THAT IN THE END
NOTHING WILL EVER BE THE SAME
CAUSE WHEN THINGS ARE BROKEN APART
IT'S HARD TO MEND THEM BACK TOGETHER

(sic) man, kicks ass. I wish I could write like that. Hwats ur band sound like?

Post hardcore, screamo. Not sure direction we're going to head though cause we just reformed. Not sure what we're going to do with this though. Just trying to do something good with my boredom.

Cool ^_^ I like. My band was meant to practice today.. but the singer is lazy and makes us record for him to write lyrics at a seperate time . And does nothing at practices lol.

www.myspace.com/beyondtheremains <- THat's just me (guitar ) and the drummer, recorded form a laptop though ^.^