Another Go At It

Nothing too special I think.
C&C

http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b1...704/render.jpg

v2
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b1...04/render2.jpg

Looks nice, but add some sparkly stuff in some places. And angle the text the other way too.

Its looking okay:) i agree with pear make the text go with the flow.