you're taunting me.
Reality is kicking in.
I can't see,
Oh, it was nothing.
Things are getting better.
Things will get better.
I'm so relieved,
You can almost see the world
Romance can justify the colour i'm seeing
It shouldn't turn for the worst
I'm so relaxed
The tide is breaking
all that was.
A memory in the sand.
08-23-2007, 01:24 AM
Deadloader
Every Line. The punctuation. Each word chosen. The amount of paragraphs. The length of each section. Each space. Was intentional.
Take it as you like (this is not mindless poetry this is only for the people who don't look at things seriously and don't like to structure everything to make sense. This isn't just words placed in an ironic way to portray art as something which no one is supposed to understand. This has a meaning.
08-23-2007, 02:27 PM
Papa
The beggining seems a bit choppy but the end is amazing. I love how you kind of slowly roll the poem to end into a memory in the sand. It is just awesome GJ.