My American History Thesis Paper.

Well, this paper is supposed to be 5-7 pages long (US Standard Paper) 8.5 x 11 Inches.


My Thesis Question is: Did modern warfare and technology increase casualty rates in World War II?

My Thesis Statement is: Modern warfare and technology increased casualty rates in World War II.

I'm not going to put my actual paper up here, but I will put up basically what it is composed of.


Introduction:
-Poison Gases
-Nuclear Bombs/Missles
-Automatic/Semi-automatic weapons

Supporting Paragragh 1
-Poison Gases
-Nerve Gases (Prohibit proper nerve functions)
-Tear Gases (Severe eye irritation, even blindness)
-Blister Gases (Produce huge, painfull blisters ALL over the body)

Supporting Paragraph 2
-Nuclear Bombs/Missles
-Japan
-Our own backyard (New Mexico, Arizona, Nevada, etc)
-Other testing areas (Antartica, Remote Islands, etc)


Supporting Paragraph 3
-Automatic/Semi-automatic weapons
-B. A. R.
-M1 Grand
-M1903 Springfield

Meh, I'm too tired to type anymore I'll type the rest tomorrow.

Do you guys like it?

Personally, I would organize it a bit differently for the beginning.

Start an intro paragraph, blah blah for space filler, finish with your thesis statement mentioning the specific issues you are going to talk about. Thesis statements don't have to be phrased in the block "This is this because this. It can come in two or three sentences, just not too dragged out.

Use the addressing of specific ideas to outline you paper. Make your paragraphs follow the order the items were mentioned. IT gives great flow to the paper and makes it much easier to understand.

So obviously identify your topic for each paragraph, but I would move each item into its own instead of talking about different aspects of a number of items in more than one paragraph each. Though the weaponry specifically could probably be its own, you just seem to want more on other topics like the gasses.

Other than that you have plenty of information to work with. Good luck!

A basic outline for a Thesis statement is as follows:

Chapter 1: Introduction

What is the problem?
Why is it important?
What have other people done?
What is central idea(s) of my approach?
How is the rest of the thesis organized?

Chapter 2: The problem

Define the problem.
Introduce the jargon.
Discuss the basic properties.

Chapter 3: Big idea 1
...
Chapter k+2: Big idea k
Chapter k+3: Conclusion


You can also use Anecdotes, which are like small stories that illustrate your point. Be sure to keep it short though. Do it right, and it'll be a hit.


Follow the guideline, discard your first 3 drafts, and you might just make it. :) Good luck pal.