My first try

http://i17.photobucket.com/albums/b7...mptioncopy.jpg

I was just trying don't be to harsh please.

Its not a bad start mate, Make add a nice bored and go easy with the lighting

1 thing tho, I cannot read that test so I would make it stand out more

wow for a beginner you sure did pick up a ton of lighting effects and you know to use C4D's

big text, in sigs like this, (imo) sucks; also add some depth [im sure you can find some tutorials either here or somewhere else where they show how to add it]

gj for a first tho

Lots of C4Ds, I think. It's damn bright and shiny and the text needs more improvement.

edit: also, the border is too thick

I would say loose some of the shiny effects they are way to strong and remove it totally on the render. instead of just using c4d's try to take some premade work and workmyou bg from there:) the border is a bit to thick.