Orlandu(whatever his name is)

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v2...y/7b714aaf.jpg
C&C

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Can you tell me is there anything i can improve on?

you need to blend the render with the BG more the tech around the text doesn't really fit the BG is weird and a bit plain needs more depth

So basically it sucks?

Basically he's give you criticisms on how to improve your work (Don't get me wrong :P). And I agree with what Sythe said. Background's a bit random and I don't really like the dots. Nice try though ;) I like your current more.