V1:
http://ic3.deviantart.com/fs11/i/200..._CenoixART.jpg
V2 :
http://i20.photobucket.com/albums/b2...ix/caught2.jpg
C&C Please.
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Way too messy man. No flow whatso ever. And the text is lacking too.
I think I get what you were trying to do, but the elements just seem too separate. It's fine if it's messy, it's just that all of the sections of the mess need to look like they're parts of a whole.
Like this:
http://img246.imageshack.us/img246/8723/temp2bt6.jpg
The green and red parts aren't alike at all, making it seem like they're just thrown together. For example, the section in red is of lower quality than the rest (you can see pixelation etc.).
Well, that's just what I noticed. I think it would look better overall if the pieces (like the 2 I pointed out) seemed like they were part of the whole thing rather than standing out so much.
I tried to fix it, I think I made it worse.
V2 is at the top.
bit messy, v2 looks like u've just ran an eraser down the middle of the thing to take out what jack didn't like.
Actually, thats not at all what I did. I almost re-did the whole thing.. -.-
