Life LP

this is a Life typography LP i have been working on the concept is life and roadss . . . it still on early conception, but i got scutk halfway through it idk anymore, any suggestions CnC are highly appreciated.... xD creative block FTL

(scaled down version sory for the low quality of it)

http://i209.photobucket.com/albums/b.../life2copy.jpg

I kind of dislike this one tbh. It's okay but not the best. The Star shines or whatever those lines in the BG are called are kinda old and i know they look cool but they are whored in like every vector LP possible.

The arrows bother me thatway too. I feel like arrows have become like a filler to make anything fit together with minimal work.
now now, before you start thinking he doesn't understand the concept. I do. The arrows are meaning for like new stages in your life and for every new stage theres a quote. ANd it just keeps going forward. However i think you should use less arrows for it, right now theres just a few too many of them, but then again i also just dont like using arrows in general so im biased.

I can't read like half the text and i don't know whether thats intentional or not. I would think you'd want me to read the important stuff like quotes from aristotle.

OVerall this is definetly a WIP and you definetly need to refine this a bit, but i really enjoy the concept of it. cool idea.

Never knew Plato and Aristotle done those quotes. I've done loads of work on them and their accounts of Sparta :)

I agree with Papa pretty much 100%.

However i could live with the arrows if you experimented with some pattern inside of the shapes. IE Make them up of lines etc. For me however, they have no meaning or actual direction ( although this may be relevant to life... ;) )

I would just work on composition, and also you have to think, how many people are actually going to read half that text? maybe 5%?

If you know of Plato and Aristotle, then i'm sure you will know about the Spartans and their minimalistic way of speaking, which tended to have more impact then a huge load of text. Think about this in your next typography piece maybe :)

Papa sums it up " OVerall this is definetly a WIP and you definetly need to refine this a bit, but i really enjoy the concept of it. cool idea."

I agree. With the bg part especially. You could fiddle with a texture for it, something along the lines of your sotw entry tag - that kind of rough texture. IMo, the arrows are alright, but they are definitely over done at this point. I do really like the typography aspect of it at this point. Very nicely done so far. Looking forward to updates

Agree with above, completely need a texture, I really like the idea, and Typo's are always nice if done well. :D
Good luck!!!

thnks for the CnC guys yeah imm gonna work on it as soon as i get it together prolly gonna work it out first on paper draw it and then move into changing i think it has some good potential but at the moment its lacking alot ill be posting an update soon i hope

It's okay i guess. The quotes as they may be called are okay. Search some up on google. The background is a little...hmmm...just read the other posts. :D