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hit me up with some critic tell me how crap it is then tell me how to improve pleeaasseee :D
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lol, i don't liek the fact that you thinkw e will say it's crap. SOme of your works on dev are really pretty good. However this one again is not one of your better works lol.
V1 for sure. The second version is obvious you just stuck a gradient map onto it.
Again the etxt needs work. Text placement: first of all why the corners? That tells me you arent confident at all in your text. You hiding it by putting it there. use a pixel font or something funky for an abstract peice like this. And then move it down to the bottom left but not to the corner. liek where the blue dots are.
Also, how long did you spend spattering the bg like that? God almighty. That must have taken awhile, and i hope it didn't take you too long, because what i'm about to say to you is gonna make you pull ur hair out. I dont like them. they just dont go. It'd be much much much betetr if you just mask out nearly all of them except for a few around the edges of the focal.
Now whats with the focal? The current style right now is bigger canvas and then have an abstract thin in the bottom left hand corner kind of smaller.
Right now thats disreagaurding both rules. And this is one of those styles i think you should stick too. It's pretty aesthetically pleasing and i think it'd help this peice quite a bit.
COmpsitionally this is really bornign too. Why have it smack int he center? It doens't add anything to your art. Move it off center so its more interesting.
Now the dots are decent. They are coming back into style and i think your smart by getting ahead of the curve. However that random pen tooling isn't good. Smaller always = better in abstract peices. People like to see a lot fo inticate detail so they think you did a lot of work.
Fainlyl again the color. i like the vintage look mixed with the highly staurated colors. But cut it down a bit. Make the color scheme fit and stick to it. It seems like you have a hard time wiht it. So i suggest you check out:
Kuler
i think it might help you.
Overall it needs work still.
great critique again man....damn this guys good....
I could easily see your work on the cover of a CD nice work.
