Max Payne

new one
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http://img5.imageshack.us/img5/5684/maxpaynexb2.jpg

Very small render and very dark, the c4d placement is very random, its supposed to be adding flow, this just adds mess. The signatue is far too busy and contrasting, its way too sharp and looks horrid.

OOOHH slightly harsh its nice but needs more flow and the c4d needs better placement, the circles near the render dont need to be their, text needs improvment, rdner is slighlty small and it is too dark, needs some filling at least

They hit the nail on the head. Overall it's okay but the render is placed badly. He's the focal isn't he? SHOW IT, lol. Make him big and in the the middle (height wise, scoot him to a side for compo). I guess oyu did it to get the gun in but it seems a bit minute to affect the sig that much.

papa said all :)) Try to improve focal point and text....