well you definately did a good job with it, but i kinda feel like its really simple, you didnt do much with it. i guess since you called it a "try" then that justifies the lack of change, and by judging simply by the quality of what you have changed, it looks really good, especially the eye shadow. i think you should try her hair, eyecolour, necklace, or shirt along with it, maybe with a contrasting colour?