In all versions the lighting to the right is too bright. Also because of the strong lighting there isn't much of contrast between the white and blue and gives it a monotonous colored feeling. The text really isn't working and neither is the blur which was overdone IMO. I can discern some effect by the focal but it needs to be harder and sharper. By blurring it no one can even tell what it is and appreciate it. Nice idea but the execution just didn't work. Keep at it and keep it up!