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a nice start but it looks unfinished, Theres not much depth because the whole background is blurred, i think there too much text.
If you was going for a sky type look, maybe put some clouds in front of the render to make it look less flat, kiu :)
i agree with krunch
take the japanese characters off and just leave it be
add some clouds if your goin for a sky look
The text needs some work;
I think you should create some flow as fx are flowing everywhere atm.
not bad mate
Text needs to go. I like the colors you were going for. Nice contrast but it needs deeper contrast and ultimately mroe lighting. Its too dim. Also try using elements in a way it can create a pleasing composition. I say you are going on the right track but it needs more work. Work on your lighting and composition. Keep at it!
