Jumpstart

http://img126.imageshack.us/img126/6...mpstartxo9.jpg

What you guys think?

First off, I'd like to say that the text was done very well.
Though, I think you over sharpened the tag.
Fix that, and post it again.

nice sprite:0

tag is OVERsharpened in this one which is ruining the effects mate.

over sharpenened and a bit messy
at a first look i couldn't make out the focal. . .

The effects are too harsh mate. They need to be smooth. I think its an interesting compo but your blending is what brought down the piece. Work on it.