Latest ~ Need help improving it

http://img35.imageshack.us/img35/3743/c4dgirl.png

V2: http://img709.imageshack.us/img709/1641/c4dgirlv2.png

V2.2: http://img132.imageshack.us/img132/9427/c4dgirlv22.png

Yeah so I've been working on this... seems unfinished, any advice?

more effects will help (c4d and maybe clp masks) and add some stylish text ;)

maybe instead of going so heavy on the c4ds, try some wireframes? Also a border :)

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Originally Posted by Lith

maybe instead of going so heavy on the c4ds, try some wireframes? Also a border :)

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Tried, wireframes ruin it.

V2 up, not sure if it's even an improvement-.-

Absolutely loveee the second one.
You're improving so much.

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Originally Posted by Fayfie

Absolutely loveee the second one.
You're improving so much.

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Thanks:) I'm glad you like it!

I like the first one a lot, its a very creative idea and its simple at the same time
Im not sure what to suggest but id keep it simple and leave out c4d's and such
Keep at it though man

I dig it. :D

Damn, I looked at this like 5 times, and I couldn't figure out what it reminds me of until now. Ever hear of desktopography? They've got some stuff in there that would probably help give you some really good ideas for this.

I like V2 better, but I'd change a few things. This is all purely speculation though, with something this unique, it's really hard to tell what will work, and maybe I'm just talking out of my ass, but hey, it's all worth a shot, yeah? :P
I'd drop the text, and maybe instead of having the road go to the right, I'd just clone it and have it keep going to the left to work better with your flow. Your flow seems to start at the top left, and moves down and to the right, but then gets kinda jumbled on the road, and that part below your type..

I like the tones in V2 better, the brightness is cool. Love your colors, and your ideas, just needs some minor improvements.