This was a little something i came up with i thought i would share with the void i don't have a title for it yet if anyone can come up with something that wold be wonderful until then i'll try to keep thinking of one myself hope you like it.
It begins in the ground burrowed in wonder
living and breathing just as any human would
over time it will grow full of life and nature
hungering for it's feast rain falls upon her
glory to it's beauty sunshine fills it with amazement
it opens it's petals slowly and releases it's perfection
as a closed rose for those who praise it to cherish forever.
01-23-2011, 02:40 PM
cC.ShorterGFX
I like it :) but i think you should work on the details a little bit more. Just make it that little bit more exciting with the vocabulary that you use. And you need to add in your punctuation otherwise the reader will not get the full effect of what you're trying to tell. But overall i think it's very nice :) good job.
