Something I wrote as a teenager (about 16ish) over 11 yes ago :S
Your life is played up though the roll you plays suited
Your tactfulness speaks words, too bad your not rooted
Your loyalty falls short of you never seeing what was of the truth
So you set your sights on disappointment and blame it on your shitty youth
Calm this boiling blood to please the on-looker but speaking so to shame the devil
You say your anger never makes it to flood level, boy you are the DEVIL
But you show the tale of undeprived, speak the story, continue to tell lies.
Is it born with a silver spoon in mouth or a history that needs to be cried about.
lol I can remember the boyfriend I wrote this about but ofc can't remember the argument anymore.
04-02-2011, 09:30 AM
edwinpabito
i love the last line just love the tone of that...
nice poem
04-02-2011, 10:00 PM
cC.DOMINO™
nice job slave, I like this, it flows well. makes sense too. sounds like the situation was tense.
04-04-2011, 12:35 PM
Takken
Good concept and nice flow though I'm not too fond of the structure. However I felt something while I was reading it as if I was standing before your scorn. Pretty weird eh lol.
I wish I was your boyfriend then. I would call myself an asshole, dick etc. and pull off every shit in the book so just that I could keep you ;) Ya, I'm a pimp like that. lol i kid.
04-04-2011, 11:54 PM
Slave
lol takken xD thanks. This was one of my fav pieces. It hit me in class one day while angry after a fight and it was so simple, i have never done any revise to this one. So yeah, felt all perfect back than :P
