fail...

What I dislike:
Your tag is empty (add more effects mate), monotone (add some vibrant yellow?), sort of washed out (near bottom), bad lighting (dodge and burn for your light sources), sort of has noise in parts (bottom left), no flow, not a fan of the composition, I don't like how the render is so contrasted with the rest of the tag in the middle, I don't like some of the effects that were used (silver parts), and should have probably been cropped.

What I like:
I like the atmosphere atm, but I think with better structure and work on the contrast it could be a lot better.

Overall:
Seems too much like a WIP. Work on it bro and possibly make it better? Would love to see a new result.

Side note:
Kiu mate.