Try at some smudging

http://i1139.photobucket.com/albums/...es/Sicabby.png

Not so great at it yet but i tried,
CnC please

Purrty colors, the smudge is sloppy, but it could also be interpreted as abstract so it kinda works IMO. I like it, I would keep at this :D Just blend the render in better around the edges, it kinda sticks out too much.

fix the vertical lines that aren't seamless, they're ugly, just smudge them in some more :D and smudge in some neony couloured streaks

I'd agree on smudging the vertical lines, and some neon smudges would be nice.
Also, whatever that is that's bouncing against her cheek is bugging the crap out of me. I guess it's part of the stock, but it just looks out of place. Pretty good work, keep it up.

I like the smudges on the 2nd one quite a bit, looks natural like it was designed like that.

The first one is a bit all over the place, but good job. :]

nice sig sean
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