I’ll know she’ll be there to help me lift my elbow.
She’ll be there when I turn old and grey.
She’s not an imagination.
I drift back from sleep.
The kids are gone, leaving me old and grey yet again…… without letting me sleep.
07-22-2005, 08:35 PM
ilovecoheed
nice man, good choice wording, but im not really the best to C&C it but what the hell, nice work.
07-22-2005, 08:36 PM
Samuel
Thanks man. Glad you toke the time to read it =D
07-22-2005, 08:37 PM
villian
very good work, you should become a poet one day you seem to have that mind were you can come up with good poems, kick ass poem man i hope to see more :)
07-22-2005, 08:40 PM
Samuel
Wozerz. Thanks for the complemient. Lol. Feels good :wink:
07-22-2005, 08:41 PM
ilovecoheed
yeah hope to see more
07-22-2005, 08:41 PM
Samuel
Ill work on it. I usually think of a situation then expand upon it.
07-22-2005, 09:06 PM
randyrandy
Is the person that you feel in your dreams the spark ignited by the little children? Anyways nice poem, good theme, excellent choices of word :)
07-22-2005, 09:09 PM
Samuel
Yes, the spark is the person i feel.I knew someone would figure that out ;)
07-22-2005, 09:13 PM
BLiZZ
wow thats awsome bfg.....great rymes...keep em comin :P