They look around, and see a puddle made from the blood that was bled.
Bodies in sight, they call for the med.
Gunfire is heard in the distance.
Citizens are dead in just an instant.
The tutsi’s hid in cathedrals, hotels, and houses.
The hutu’s army fought not leaving alive a single mouse.
Just upon the entrance of the UN,
We have already lost too many men.
People are crying.
People are dieing.
07-23-2005, 09:48 PM
ROTD
nice job but if u want it to ryhme or flow ... which it seemed like you did... i dunno work on this part
They look around, and see the pond full of red.
Bodies in sight, they call for the meds.
doesnt sound right but overall nice effort man
07-23-2005, 10:19 PM
Samuel
Changed it too
They look around, and see a puddle made from the blood that was bled.
Bodies in sight, they call for the med.
Thanks mate.
07-24-2005, 11:37 AM
ilovecoheed
Gj bfg i like it, has a nice flow to it.
07-25-2005, 02:07 PM
PlatinumKittyKat
i like what you did with this part
They look around, and see a puddle made from the blood that was bled.
Bodies in sight, they call for the med
This is a powerful piece, i like when people shine light on the things most poeple dont usually like to talk about. I really like this... good work BFG