Break up song

oh god.. i almost fainted at some of the.. uhh... awkward rhyming you seemingly just threw in there.. heres a few examples..

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"i can't believe you don't understand that i was the one.
You took my heart and fucking smashed it, yeah, just for fun"

and

"Keep telling lies, straight to my face, it only makes things worse.
"Doctor doctor, we've got no pulse", "quick go and get the nurse!""
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uhh but other then that its an overall good song, a little odd in some places but keep writing, you just build upon your songwriting skills overtime.. at least i hope you will ^^ thats what generally happens when you practice

if you've listened to any coheed and cambria songs you'll notice that claudio has a different way of rhyming more abstract that's what i was going for. it may look different but it sounds good the way i sing it.

it hurts my virgin ears.. lol j/k very nice song.. with ur permission i have a bitch that needs to hear this... :P

lol go for it. just don't take it as your own...or else i'll have to drop kick you bro lol.

haha i say everyone that plays guitar should have a go at this.... see who can make it sound the best/funniest.

are you going to record this coheed?

i'm only fifteen so i dunno if i will...i used to have an old 4 track recorder lol...but it got stolen

no offence,
but i hate teen sob storys..
smoke some reffer be happy man, life goes on.

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Originally posted by ilovecoheed@19 Hours Ago
lol go for it. just don't take it as your own...or else i'll have to drop kick you bro lol.

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lol its not a sob story its a way to let feelings out. good job man and try to drop kick me and i will kill madd..

yeah i know i was just fucking around when i wrote this...i also hate bands that are all fucking teenage sob stories.

sounds like a good idea to me. ;)

sob stories are a way of getting feelings out...