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Loved yours MasterDuckie! :D Although some parts could be worded better; it seems like you didnt work too much on em.
And narco, some of your lines are good, yep yep, I didnt read all coz they're lots of lines but what I read was good. Well the rape thing was not my style but I liked its ending.
Ok wtf @ all of you are messed up little freaks. Who the **** writes about rape? sheesh, they have people who can help you...maybe.
1 word: talent
See I dont need help read it all and interprut it.. its about a dream, not just rape. I am this way because I am and I do not need help so please dont act like you know I do when you do not know me. also thanks for allt he kind words on them :)
Heres a new one I'm working on:
Unhollowed
Look at me, a hideous killing machine.
Hands soaked in the blood of the innocent.
Their lives have become part of my twisted game.
As I wander through this horrendous life,
I wonder is there a God and why he allows this monstrocity that is me.
On this darkest winters night, time shall stand still.
As I wreak havock through the city leaving a trail of travesty behind me.
The lines of corpses goes on for miles.
Thousands of lives taken all for my amusement.
I'm not done but I know how I want it to end just cant make it sound good
My title is called, "Crispitos" ;)
he he he... I'll post some when i get the time.
yes.. i didnt spend much time.. never do..Quote:
Originally posted by Em][n3m@May 24 2005, 07:49 AM
Loved yours MasterDuckie! :D Although some parts could be worded better; it seems like you didnt work too much on em.
And narco, some of your lines are good, yep yep, I didnt read all coz they're lots of lines but what I read was good. Well the rape thing was not my style but I liked its ending.
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and i didnt mean to right about rape.... not really the point...
Did you write about rape cause I think they were talkin about me.. :P
i dont know.. i was confused.. they need to add quotes... so we know who is talking about what and what is talking about who..
Exaclty but I'm thinkin me cause the first one I posted was about rape
Life is nothing anymore.
Its become meaningless.
I see no point in continueing on.
I look into your eyes, theyre cold as winters night.
You show me no concern. I try to tell you my problems no emotion at all.
All I wanted was your care, your concern.
Instead you've given me grief.
Made life not worth living.
just the sound of your name makes me sick.
I really wish that I could find meaning in life.
No one is there to help me.
All I want is for someone to care.
No one is there.
As I cry out in vain.
My life has become a black hole.
Everything that once was mine all gone.
Turned into this meaningless life.
Memories of you playing over and over again in my head,
Like a broken record.
Tormenting me, pushing me over the edge.
Hard as I try I cant stop them.
Only one thing left to do.
As I cry out in vengance.
I hold this knife to my wrist.
It all becomes clear now.
Everything youve ever said.. Just a ****ing lie.
Blood runs down my arms, I take my final breathe.
My blood is on your hands..
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As I wander through the field.
I see all the pretty flowers, as I touch them.
They all turn to black.
I look to the sky, see clouds of blood.
Everything I touch falls to pieces.
Why cant my life just be easy?
When will God make this easy for me?
I have to suffer until the end.. The end of ****ing time.
I walk these dark streets.
I wander through life aimlessly.
No lcue where the **** I'm going.
Theres just one thing for certain.
Life does not agree with me.
Everything I touch falls to pieces.
Why cant my life just be easy?
When will God make this easy for me?
I have to suffer until the end.. The end of ****ing time.
As I look to the sky, I see the colorful rainbows turn to black.
Hands soaked with the sins of my past life.
As hard as I try to wash myself of them nothing works.
Life is just a waste of time, nothing goes right for me.
When will life let me win for once?
When will life let me wash my hands of this...
