Break up song

[intro guitar]

[Verse 1]

once again i'm on my knees i'm at the mercy of you

i'm left for dead, broken hearted, and my voice is subdued

i can't believe you don't understand that i was the one.

You took my heart and fucking smashed it, yeah, just for fun

[Chorus]

So fuck it all
i don't need you now
like i didn't then
so why pretend

and your not the person
that i thought you were
ego suicide
and this shit all seems blurred

[Verse 2]

Late that night i called your house to see if you were home
And your not there, i'm not suprised, i bet your fucking boned!
Keep telling lies, straight to my face, it only makes things worse.
"Doctor doctor, we've got no pulse", "quick go and get the nurse!"

[Chorus]

So fuck it all
i don't need you now
like i didn't then
so why pretend

and your not the person
that i thought you were
ego suicide
and this shit all seems blurred

[Bridge]

So take that blade and make it count
and spill your heart, yeah every ounce.

[secondary vocals in background, repeat on through the last chorus]
So take that blade and make it count
and spill your heart, yeah every ounce.

[Chorus]

So fuck it all
i don't need you now
like i didn't then
so why pretend

and your not the person
that i thought you were
ego suicide
and this shit all seems blurred! (scream that last blurred, let ring out)

[outro guitar]


Any C & C? i'm very proud of this deep and dark break up song.

i really really like this song. its awesome. it would be amazing to hear a band play this. be it yours or whoever. a very good, and very compelling song ( i just wanted to use that word :P )

but i really like it, i can almost hear it in my head as i read it.

Thanx alot man. I'm really tryingto get a band together cuz i can sing and play guitar.

awesome, i hope you find some who are good to go along with you, and with lyrics like those, it would be hard to be bad. :P

:)

haha its like so cheesy that its good
it would be a fun song

cheesy?

I have 2 words for the girl that song is about ilovecoheed.
RESTRAINING ORDER!!!

any song that has the word 'fuck' in the chorus is hard to take serious haha (not trying to offend you are going for a dark song)

is this trying to be a serious song or a fun crowd pleaser?

just a fuck around song it's not serious. And natashead i'm a calm and levelheaded person it' not like i'd ever do anything no matter how much i hated anything, which i don't

oh god.. i almost fainted at some of the.. uhh... awkward rhyming you seemingly just threw in there.. heres a few examples..

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"i can't believe you don't understand that i was the one.
You took my heart and fucking smashed it, yeah, just for fun"

and

"Keep telling lies, straight to my face, it only makes things worse.
"Doctor doctor, we've got no pulse", "quick go and get the nurse!""
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uhh but other then that its an overall good song, a little odd in some places but keep writing, you just build upon your songwriting skills overtime.. at least i hope you will ^^ thats what generally happens when you practice

if you've listened to any coheed and cambria songs you'll notice that claudio has a different way of rhyming more abstract that's what i was going for. it may look different but it sounds good the way i sing it.

it hurts my virgin ears.. lol j/k very nice song.. with ur permission i have a bitch that needs to hear this... :P

lol go for it. just don't take it as your own...or else i'll have to drop kick you bro lol.

haha i say everyone that plays guitar should have a go at this.... see who can make it sound the best/funniest.

are you going to record this coheed?

i'm only fifteen so i dunno if i will...i used to have an old 4 track recorder lol...but it got stolen

no offence,
but i hate teen sob storys..
smoke some reffer be happy man, life goes on.

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Originally posted by ilovecoheed@19 Hours Ago
lol go for it. just don't take it as your own...or else i'll have to drop kick you bro lol.

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lol its not a sob story its a way to let feelings out. good job man and try to drop kick me and i will kill madd..

yeah i know i was just fucking around when i wrote this...i also hate bands that are all fucking teenage sob stories.

sounds like a good idea to me. ;)

sob stories are a way of getting feelings out...

Sounds like this could be a ballad...then transition into some heavy thrash with a X-tremely fast guitar solo in E harmonic minor to really show the bitch your pain and eerie side.http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v6...d/headbang.gif