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full of tacky names I is
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lol first off. It's wayyy too dark. I could barley see the c4d. IT is pretty good though I'll give you that. Also you should take those scan lines off. It really just makes it look sloppy. But other than that it isn't bad.

there really inst anything to look at..
if you were going for emptiness you hit it spot on though.

I could see this as the first step to something really awesome.. HOWEVER, it's way too empty.. Add some more renders and effects to it and I think it'll make it a whole lot better.. :) Nice render even though it's too empty.. ;)

i agree with these guys, this has potential, just needs more to it. lighten it up a little, bring out those colours. rock da house :p

The tutorial you followed for the material, is basically, a load of bs. You need to be able to see the render more - add a volumetric light in somewhere to shine through ;) If you dont know how to do this, theres a tutorial in the C4D section under the tips and tricks thread

Otherwise, I like the colors of it, just the darkness of the image puts me off

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Originally Posted by rob

...If you dont know how to do this, theres a tutorial in the C4D section under the tips and tricks thread

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Albeit one which is in your wacom handwriting - which some people seem to find difficult to read o_0


Yeah, I will agree with everyone else - too dark. Even just boosting the exposure in photoshop (I used settings 3.5, -0.01, 1.3) helps with the piece - and those scanlines are annoying.

thanks for the suggestions/critiques/comments/advises guys

edited it a little.
brighter.
no scanlines.
http://img184.imageshack.us/img184/2259/v2jv7.png

Lots better =]

It's a lot better, but it's still a lot of emptiness.. I like the render itself though.. :) ;)

thanks (: Guess I shouldn't have used such a big canvas..

yeah the size is a little too much in the vertical, and it still feels just a little bit barren. maybe add a very transparent gradient to the background to give it a little bit more. good work though.

It looks better make the canvas, less high so it dont seem that empty. the render looks fantastic