B.O.B -- I could really use a wish right now

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B.O.B Ft Hayley Williams - Airplanes

[Hayley Williams - Chorus]
Can we pretend that airplanes
In the night sky
Are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now
Wish right now, wish right now
Can we pretend that airplanes
In the night sky
Are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now
Wish right now, Wish right now

[B.o.B - Verse 1]
Yeah
I could use a dream or a genie or a wish
To go back to a place much simpler than this
'Cause after all the partyin'
The smashin' and crashin'
And all the glitz and the glam and the fashion
And all the pandemonium and all the madness
There comes a time when you fade to the blackness
And when you're starin' at that phone in yo' lap
And hopin', but them people never call you back
But that's just how the story unfolds
You get another hand
Soon after you fold
And when your plans unravel in the sand
What would you wish for if you had one chance?
So airplanes airplanes
Sorry I'm late
I'm on my way
So don't close that gate
If I don't make that
Then I switch my flight
And I'll be right back at it
By the end of the night

[Hayley Williams - Chorus]
Can we pretend that airplanes
In the night sky
Are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now
Wish right now, wish right now
Can we pretend that airplanes
In the night sky
Are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now
Wish right now, wish right now

[B.o.B - Verse 2]
Yeah
Yeah
Somebody take me back to the days
Before this was a job
Before I got paid
Before it ever mattered what I had in my bank
Yeah back when I was tryin' to get a tip at Subway
And back when I was rappin' for the hell of it
But now days we rappin' to stay relevant
I'm guessin' that if we can make some wishes out of airplanes
Then maybe oh maybe I'll go back to the days
Before the politics that we call the rap game
And back when ain't nobody listened to my mixtape
And back before I tried to cover up my slang
But this is for Decatur
What's up Bobby Ray?
So can I get a wish to end the politics
And get back to the music that started this shit
So here I stand
And then again I say
I'm hopin' we can make some wishes outta airplanes

[Hayley Williams - Chorus]
Can we pretend that airplanes
In the night sky
Are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now
Wish right now, wish right now
Can we pretend that airplanes
In the night sky
Are like shooting stars
I could really use a wish right now
Wish right now, wish right now

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kn6-c223DUU

Comments, in my oppinion its one of my best i love it :)

render looks really lq and i really dont dig the text bro... anyway kiu

Composition is lacking some elements and some parts look a little blurry. Work more on your lighting and remove the text. Increase contrast. Keep at it!

lol the text is there because thats what the whole thing is bassed on, thats why i made it through the song if you listen you will see where i got all the bg ideas and so on, and for the render quality, that was the highest quallity there was and i cut it myself

oh and i forgot for the lighting it doesnt have to be in every sig i just thought id darken some bits, not all sigs have too look the same with lighting etc, thats what im trying to put accross otherwise we will all end up with the same styles

well i think instead of the denying the criticism you should listen to it. i hate it when people ask for CnC and only appreciate the good comments like good job. those comments are completely pointless and dont help a piece at all. you should take the constructive criticism and learn. lighting for example is needed in every piece. lighting does not have to be the same because there are many different techniques to lighting. as for the text you dont havta remove it but it looks bad. try to reinvent it in another way

kindaaa bright
not really an 'epic' tag

Gray Scaled tags has never really appealed to me. :c
As for the text, its a little unfitting; perhaps make the quote smaller and put B.O.B above it? Do something creative with it.
I also dislike the way you decided to put a white splatter at the side of his face. It doesn't flow well with the feel because the feel of the tag is nice and soft.
The backgrounds needs a little bit of depth and contrast as well.

Though overall, I like the use of clouds. c:

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Originally Posted by JustInCredible

well i think instead of the denying the criticism you should listen to it. i hate it when people ask for CnC and only appreciate the good comments like good job. those comments are completely pointless and dont help a piece at all. you should take the constructive criticism and learn. lighting for example is needed in every piece. lighting does not have to be the same because there are many different techniques to lighting. as for the text you dont havta remove it but it looks bad. try to reinvent it in another way

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JIC im not denying anything im just asking questions, i do that to learn even more..

text ain't in a good position imo also the stream of lines coming from his mouth doesn't suit imo.

keep it up

Text needs work
Light is to bright
Bob looks kinda LQ

keep at it
:)