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it is kidna unfocused and jumps around alot....so just bare with me
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Not good, not bad
Not happy, not sad
Not there, not here
In the middle afraid of fear
Afraid of all I see and hear
Not afraid to be afraid.
Afraid to have the fear I paid
I was told to sort my life out straight
Well I said it was already to late
I got the response it’s never to late
You just need to find what makes you feel great
I don’t love, I don’t hate
I need to feel if I want to feel great
Nothing I want, nothing I need
Not filled with generosity, or with greed
Empty inside.
It’s the reason I hide
Afraid to show my soul to your eyes
Afraid if I do. You will say your goodbyes
Not afraid to be alone
Only afraid of being a mindless drone
Sleep is my only release from this time
Wasting this life would be a crime.
A crime to who…. to those who cant live
Well fuck them and fuck me. If they want I will give
I don’t need this anymore to see
Who I am is all I can be
I am cold… from the escaping heat
My life is done…it is complete
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EDIT: kk switchd last 2 lines.thx for you suggestions and comments peoples...i will try to post more.
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i like it Runch ..GJ
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Yeah, i like really like it runch. The only thing i'd say is that it would end much better if you use that 2nd to last line "My life is done…it is complete" as the last line. IMO, ending with the word complete would be much better.
But then again, i'm no poet :P
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I think its really good too.. but I agree with unforgotten..the last two lines should be switched. =) Keep writing Runch.. we need to keep this section alive!!! LoL
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Good work man. Definatley switch those last two up. Good shit!
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Great work man!
yeah there are a few of us keeping this section alive, i'll post more poems later, i gotta get ready for marching band soon...
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