not sure what to call it

[Runch]

it is kidna unfocused and jumps around alot....so just bare with me



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Not good, not bad

Not happy, not sad

Not there, not here

In the middle afraid of fear

Afraid of all I see and hear

Not afraid to be afraid.

Afraid to have the fear I paid

I was told to sort my life out straight

Well I said it was already to late

I got the response it’s never to late

You just need to find what makes you feel great

I don’t love, I don’t hate

I need to feel if I want to feel great

Nothing I want, nothing I need

Not filled with generosity, or with greed

Empty inside.

It’s the reason I hide

Afraid to show my soul to your eyes

Afraid if I do. You will say your goodbyes

Not afraid to be alone

Only afraid of being a mindless drone

Sleep is my only release from this time

Wasting this life would be a crime.

A crime to who…. to those who cant live

Well fuck them and fuck me. If they want I will give

I don’t need this anymore to see

Who I am is all I can be

I am cold… from the escaping heat

My life is done…it is complete



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EDIT: kk switchd last 2 lines.thx for you suggestions and comments peoples...i will try to post more.

[*Peng*]

i like it Runch ..GJ

[Unforgotten]

Yeah, i like really like it runch. The only thing i'd say is that it would end much better if you use that 2nd to last line "My life is done…it is complete" as the last line. IMO, ending with the word complete would be much better.
But then again, i'm no poet :P

[PlatinumKittyKat]

I think its really good too.. but I agree with unforgotten..the last two lines should be switched. =) Keep writing Runch.. we need to keep this section alive!!! LoL

[Samuel]

Good work man. Definatley switch those last two up. Good shit!

[ilovecoheed]

Great work man!

yeah there are a few of us keeping this section alive, i'll post more poems later, i gotta get ready for marching band soon...