girl troubles...

[Deadloader]

i'd thank you for the message...
you left on my telephone,
but lately i've been calling,
and.. your not at home,
i've got a great big problem,
and i'm already dead,
you promised me everything.
..and shot myself in the head.

why do you hate me,
why do you love me like you do,
i can't decide now!!
between me and you.

And your gone
you left your notebook on my bedroom floor
i looked in side
and.. realised you are just a whore,
you ate away at my heart
all i wanted was a fresh start
i hope your happy
...

nothing changes from here on now,
i'm rotting in your mind,
you cut me in a moment.
and i thank you for being kind...

[PlatinumKittyKat]

I really like this. I like how you're showing both the positive and negative sides to a relationship/break up.

[Tenchido]

Nice job man!!! Send it to her
I Did the same with my ex. I Wrote one and sent it to her over the computer... This is accually really good though. Deffinatly a keeper.

[Hitman]

lol it rhymes sort of to yes send it to her.. i know this isnt a laughing matter but its kinda funny.. but w/e i think its all good

[randyrandy]

Wow, I like you! and It!

Some parts I don't really understand, but most of it is excellent!

[AgainstAllOdds]

Muahahaha emo-rap YES!!!!!!!!!&# 33;!!!!

but seriously that is great I wish I could write like that

[Deadloader]

awww shucks! :lol:

emo-rap :lol: have you hear that rap about emos? haha it's so stupid! (plus emo-rap is a genre of music )

keep clean.. don't do drugs B)

[Ragidy_man]

Max - r ur emo