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[Ritz]

Text kills it...as always

[Phayze]

not bad. text isn't that bad. just get rid of that yellow "beauty" text and will look a lot better.

border is out.

erase some of the c4ds over the focal. nice effects tho.

[navb01]

nice effects and c4d take the stroke off the text though

[Ptka]

A bit "less" text and this would be great!
Loving the use of C4D's, they complement the focal.
And the effects aren't bad either.
I want to see a little more depth however, try sharpening the render slightly and blurring the background a tiny bit.

[Ritz]

will do, appreciate the cnc guys.