part of a song

[ilovecoheed]

she bleeds,
the blackest blood tonight,
all the wasted time and all the fuckin lies

and the posion,
that carries your words to her ears
so fragile, her dark mascara smears

and as tears of blood run down her face,
all the memories of things she hates.
all the twisted grins and mishapen fates.
she shrivels up and dies.

this is part of a hardcore/emo song i wrote, might sound funky without the right beat, but it sounds pretty good to me with the beat i made up.

[PlatinumKittyKat]

it sounded just fine for me! I really liek this.

[Dale]

Pretty cool - but it seems to be based alot on Bleeding Mascara - Atreyu If you've heard that. Not bad =) I don't like emo.. but Hardcore / screamo rocks =D

[ilovecoheed]

yeah i was kinda listening to coheed and cambria, a7x and atreyu while i wrote this lol

p.s. coheed 's new cd is out today!!!! go buy it lol

My Dearest Apollo, I'm Burning Star IV Volume 1: From Fear Through the Eyes of Maddness

i've listened to the whole cd, and it fuckin rocks.

[masokist]

it does remind me a little of bleeding mascara, but i like it, its really good, great job, and keep it up.

[ilovecoheed]

thanx, i'm probably going to finish it, revise it, and hopefully get together a band finally and write the different parts and play it.

i've been dying to be in a band for a long time.