ok, being able to see it now that I'm home, I have to say that I like it.
It's not cluttered, it's pretty smooth.
Effects are nice and I think the render is blended in enough.
Text could use work though, not sure if that blue color is working.

it's a little long, which creates alot of space on the left hand side there, you maybe you could crop that some.

Maybe sharpening the focal some would help too.

not bad though.