Passed Away Forever More

[Samuel]

Passed Away Forever More

He's gone and never coming back.

Why did he die, what did he lack?

He didn't care what the doctors said.

He wanted to die, what was he fed?

Lying in the casket so lifeless and cold.

Who was around? Did he grow old?

Abundant of love, but died alone.

Why did he love, no one would call him on the phone.

Pointless of life, full of agony.

How did he live peacefully, or vengefully?

Dead and gone, forever more.

[Papa]

YEAH! I'm glad you got back into poetry BFG. I think it's awesom just liek your otehr peotry. ITs pretty deap and makes you think about your life and how it's going.

There is really only one thing i dont liek and thats the end. The last part:

Do they ever remember the old, cold, alone, agonized, or poor?

Maybe shorten that into 1 or two describing words that fit it all like..hopeless or something.. I don't know. EItehr way awesome job i love it.

[Samuel]

Yeah, that last line was just thrown in. I think I'll just end it with:

Dead and gone, forever more.

[Papa]

Yeah i think that would be much better. It would kind of make everything flow more .

[Daemon]

Yeah, that last line was just thrown in. I think I'll just end it with:

Dead and gone, forever more.

yep that would sound much better very nice poem there