i like what you've got going on, but the orange is extremely blurry and pixelated, the silhouette needs some work, the edges are are rough and choppy in places such as the neck. the text isn't amazing, but not terrible, i spose it just fits what you're doing. and i'm not liking the flat, straight lines under "sun."

like you said it needs some work. though you have the artistic thought going well, now you've gotta hone in more on the skills, and basically get really anal about details, but keep it up