English letter

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Hey guys,

I had to make an english letter for my english lesson and this is what I got
Can someone check it for me That would be awesome

V-money for the person who helps me the most

Chrysantenhof 59
2651 XK Berkel en Rodenrijs
The Netherlands

3 October 2005

Dear John,

1. How are you now after the vacation, did you do anything special|? Did you go on vacation or anything? I heard you were with a friend of yours, am I right? When did you leave and how did you travel? I’ve been to southern Spain to enjoy the sun. My friend and I traveled by airplane.

2. What did you do in all your spare time? I’ve been laying in the sun almost whole the vacation. I had very nice weather and much hot chicks were at the beach. That was lots of fun.

3. Did you meet anyone special? Because I met a beautiful girl when I was walking at the beach. She is also from The Netherlands, but she lives a bit far from my home. The girl was a real funny girl with a great sense of humor. That’s why we’ve had laughed very much.

4. But I’m going to end this letter now because I have loads and loads of homework.

See you,
Andreas

[Chriz]

Yo andreas ,

'much hot chicks' sounds wrong to me
I think it should be 'there were many hot chicks'

'all your spare time?' i think you can leave 'all' out

'That’s why we’ve had laughed very much.'
Dont know about this one but 've = have and had are double i think. I dont know if the time is correct, i think simple past is better. 'why we laughed that much'

'How are you now after the vacation'
I dont think vacation means going somewhere to spent your holiday. I would choose holiday instead of vacation.

Success B)

Chriz

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Thanks m8 xD

now I hope lokai likes it :P

[Chriz]

you still have lokai
sorry to hear that

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I dont think you guys no mrs lokai well I found a pic from here



pretty recent

[ZeekUnreloaded]

GEEZ DON'T HAVE A COW! Har har har. ehhhhhhh

That is one sexy beast.

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I'd tap it. haha good luck with english!

[Metal]

Dear John,

1. How are you now after the vacation, did you do anything special? Did you go on vacation or anything? I heard you were with a friend of yours, am I right? When did you leave and where did you travel? I’ve been to southern Spain to enjoy the sun. My friend and I traveled by airplane.

2. What did you do in your spare time? I’ve been laying in the sun almost the whole time. The weather was nice and many hot chicks were at the beach. That was fun.

3. Did you meet anyone special? Because I met a beautiful girl when I was walking on the beach. She is also from The Netherlands, but she lives a bit far from my home. The girl was real funny and had a great sense of humor. That’s why we laughed so much.

4. But I’m going to end this letter now because I have loads and loads of homework.

See you,
Andreas

I think this is a little more understandable... Use it if you want GL with your schoolshit

[Elite Newb]

mrs. lokai is so sexy.