My First 3d

[Rawk]

Its my first 3d render, I threw it on a easy 800x600 wallpaper backgrond thing, etc etc, feed please.
Btw.. I dont want dumb feed please tell me everything thats wrong with it, and right etc. and if you can how to fix it

[Clutch]

text could be better...its alright..idk im not feelin it a little basic some how..