the departed

[Ritz]

trying something new, hopefully text is getting better

[Buckley]

Good Sig bro

[Bluiceflamez]

Text needs a little work and maybe you should've stuck to one color on the c4ds and blend them in a little more.

[Kanariya]

I think the text -could- work. Don't use stroke, i think it looks nasty in most cases.
Tone down the colours of the text because they draw too much attention away from the focal.

[1LastHope]

I have a number of text tutorials on my blog that could help you.
When in doubt go with a block text like Helvetica or Impact, with
a Visitor subtext. Clean, neat and easy.