I love the idea, but the execution could have been way better.
The render looks a bit poorly cut out, and it's VERY bright.
Spread out the text in the background a bit, but I do love the way it's partially covered.
Background could have just been a medical lab or something, but blurred to give some depth, and that would have worked PERFECTLY!!!
I URGE you to try again with a different background, this one could be a VERY funny piece.