Nice to see you making something Dean If you compare your current with this there really isnt a comparison, you can do way better man. When your doing a typography you need to make the text, your main focus, stand out in a fancy, eye catching way. Here, its just plain white. Also the foreground and bg c4d's are way overcontrasted. There is good depth, although no flow at all. I know you can do way better than that man. Keep working hard.