blend more. needs some lowlights. i like how you make the layers intertwine, but i think you need to choose a focal point and accent it, rather than just layers on top of layers making layers look like... a picture...

and...
i'm pretty sure that kids japanese...
my asian-radar isnt as good as my dad's (i'm only half chinese...) but... i'm pretty sure of that... not positive... but yeah.... lol...........