the lighting isnt bad but its a bit strong. The effects are nice but dont stand out enough, make your effects pop more by sharpening them and using c4ds and other techniques.

The render looks like its maybe a bit oversharpened, im not sure though, but look into that. Also i think the render is to contrasting whilst the bg and effects arnt contrasting enough. You want your sig to really pop out at the view, this one is a bit dull. Use Adjustment layers to work with your brightness, contrast, and colors. I would suggest some selective color adjusts, and a b/w grad map set to luminosity.

for the text, i would "AND MEN" under and slightly to the right of "OF DEVILS"

kiu the work, hope this helps